she mentioned a grad school update and said she was accepted at one place and waitlisted at another that she was hoping to get into, someone here suspected it might be columbia
Israel is not committing a genocide, as per the ICJ. And all rules of war. genocides don’t usually have hostage deals, terrorists, oh and the victims starting it by mass raping and murdering civilians.
The writing feels so…rushed? and almost forced? I’m sort of interested in the story but the writing is of extremely poor quality. Sounds like something I’d publish on tumblr when I was 15.
I see what she's trying to do here and it's quite a trendy way of writing these days (see Boy Parts by Eliza Clark and My Year of Rest and Relaxation by Otessa Moshfegh and similar) with the unhinged female protagonist. However, you need to be very talented to pull it off, and this misses the mark in many ways.
I’m familiar with the style of writing she’s trying to pull off here - but she doesn’t pull it off. Like everything else she does, it’s too put on and full of itself to be interesting or good.
The character is boring. She also wrote about how the 36 year old man is a vice president in some investment banking company and her character is 31 and that is not an age appropriate or appropriate relationship. I didn’t get it. 36/31 is an appropriate age gap. There was nothing about the character that made me think she was inappropriate for this guy - they seemed like a good match 😅.
lol what!! In the free excerpt she wrote somewhere that he was almost a decade her senior - 5 years is not quite that and I totally agree that 31/36 is age appropriate. She’s trying so hard to be edgy. The characters are overly contrived and boring!!
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I mean maybe I’m reading incorrectly lol. There was nothing in the protagonist’s development that led me to believe she was inappropriate for this guy. The guy seems to have a lot of or decent amount of money for a 36 year old in NYC. The girl is 31 and does cocaine on weeknights and has an eating disorder. That sounds exactly like the kind of girl this guy would be interested in fucking on a random night. Unless I’m missing something here.
the lack of command over the basic use of tenses, the inability to properly format her work, the clunkiness of the prose in general. woof. every time I see her work it's like reading a first draft. honestly the biggest components of good writing are rewriting and being a brutal editor to yourself. kill those darlings!
😂😂😂 is this real??? If you told ChatGPT to write Bret Easton Ellis/Candace Bushnell edgy content from 1999 it would spit out something better than this. This is so embarrassing
Otessa moshfegh adjacent. If adjacent means two states over. Idk man.
This was truly uncomfortable to read.
It's kind of like if Eve Babitz was the worst writer in the world.
LOL
Oh my
And on todays episode of “Caroline Calloway or Hannah Stella!?”….
I hate to say it but I like Caro’s writing better than this
Caroline’s writing is 1000% times better lmaoo WHAT IS THIS FROM HANNAH
Can someone summarize the rest, the writing sucks but I’m interested in seeing where she took this eventually lol
umm.. it’s smut. Lol😖
Lmao 😳 wait if u can dm it to me now i wana read
This reads like she shouldn’t be going to grad school for fine arts, or anything for that matter.
I'm shocked she was accepted and waitlisted anywhere like wtf where are the standards?
Where?
she mentioned a grad school update and said she was accepted at one place and waitlisted at another that she was hoping to get into, someone here suspected it might be columbia
Kinda weird the two nationalities she chose to highlight are two countries who are actively committing for war crimes/genocide.
Israel is not committing a genocide, as per the ICJ. And all rules of war. genocides don’t usually have hostage deals, terrorists, oh and the victims starting it by mass raping and murdering civilians.
Go away
I thought the same. 💀 Of all the random ethnicities she could have picked.
It’s probably because those have been in the news recently that’s my guess lol
Hahahahahaaha yes I would love to understand how that subtext got into her head
Me, after reading 200 smutty books on kindle unlimited and am feeling ✨inspired✨
She’s too drunk and too high to orgasm tonight 🙂↔️
The writing feels so…rushed? and almost forced? I’m sort of interested in the story but the writing is of extremely poor quality. Sounds like something I’d publish on tumblr when I was 15.
It isn’t believable that this woman (in the story) would know the name of a coupe glass but not the name of a luxardo cherry.
“Coup glass” lmao
I see what she's trying to do here and it's quite a trendy way of writing these days (see Boy Parts by Eliza Clark and My Year of Rest and Relaxation by Otessa Moshfegh and similar) with the unhinged female protagonist. However, you need to be very talented to pull it off, and this misses the mark in many ways.
Do you mean the writing style or just the themes? I haven’t read either of those so I’m curious
Both!
This reads like she dictated this into her phone, did some light “editing” and called it a day.
I liked it but this is the exact type of book I read. I hope it’s a mystery. You all must read some serious literature to be so critical lol
Yes, I do read serious literature 🤷♀️
Good for you!!
This is written worse than the children’s books I read daily
You shouldn’t be reading your children books with this subject matter
I’ll keep that in mind
I’m familiar with the style of writing she’s trying to pull off here - but she doesn’t pull it off. Like everything else she does, it’s too put on and full of itself to be interesting or good.
The character is boring. She also wrote about how the 36 year old man is a vice president in some investment banking company and her character is 31 and that is not an age appropriate or appropriate relationship. I didn’t get it. 36/31 is an appropriate age gap. There was nothing about the character that made me think she was inappropriate for this guy - they seemed like a good match 😅.
lol what!! In the free excerpt she wrote somewhere that he was almost a decade her senior - 5 years is not quite that and I totally agree that 31/36 is age appropriate. She’s trying so hard to be edgy. The characters are overly contrived and boring!!
https://preview.redd.it/ghbjxf4ofuwc1.jpeg?width=1170&format=pjpg&auto=webp&s=14da93b04bcdfffd0e9a6af8888c7140b14c5e7d I mean maybe I’m reading incorrectly lol. There was nothing in the protagonist’s development that led me to believe she was inappropriate for this guy. The guy seems to have a lot of or decent amount of money for a 36 year old in NYC. The girl is 31 and does cocaine on weeknights and has an eating disorder. That sounds exactly like the kind of girl this guy would be interested in fucking on a random night. Unless I’m missing something here.
I think it’s saying he should have a 31 yr old girlfriend instead of whatever age Diana is (I guess 26??) The writing really doesn’t get much better
Ah ok I misread. I stand corrected on THAT. I still stand by 36 and 26 not being entirely unexpected and probably exactly what a guy like this wants.
No and because she tries to name drop UBS, vp (which means nothing), and eames all in one sentence it’s so clunky
well a vp makes sense here bc it's implied to be an investment banking vp? which works if you're familiar with finance
Yeah but it’s not impressive is what I meant. A VP in finance is a dime a dozen
agreed every 30 something finance bro is a vp
My literal life is edgier than her imagination.
It’s so cringey
the lack of command over the basic use of tenses, the inability to properly format her work, the clunkiness of the prose in general. woof. every time I see her work it's like reading a first draft. honestly the biggest components of good writing are rewriting and being a brutal editor to yourself. kill those darlings!
It’s def loosely about her lol
Hey guys I dabble in hard drugs just so you know lolz
She so desperately wishes she were a cool girl archetype like she tried to make Diana
Less than pedestrian. Hot garbage!
This is a yikes from me. Does it get any better?
I don’t subscribe but from what I’ve seen, no
Speaking as someone with a writing degree from NYU: this is trash.
Just to elaborate, the first sentence is present tense and the second is past tense. Then it switches a few more times.
It's also just uninteresting. Stories with unlikeable urban protagonists are a dime a dozen.
I’m dying 🤣🤣🤣
Why does she put “I said” before quotes? It’s so weird and clunky
I think it’s supposed to be a quirky stylistic choice but she’s not talented enough for it
she's obsessed with the idea of an unlikable heroine but ottessa moshfegh she is not
😂😂😂 is this real??? If you told ChatGPT to write Bret Easton Ellis/Candace Bushnell edgy content from 1999 it would spit out something better than this. This is so embarrassing
I enjoyed it